Moment in Time Writing

This week Room 5 has been learning to use their senses to help them make their writing more personal and interesting.

Room 5's teacher modelled an example and then they did their own writing from pictures of school children around the world who travel dangerously to get to school. Room 5 had to write from one of the children's point of view in the photo.

Graphics from "The Writing Book" were used to give students feedback. Next week students will be using the graphics themselves to give each other meaningful feedback.

Here is a sample of some of the writing.

Name: Sateki

Date: 26/7/18

Learning Goal:

We are learning TO USE OUR SENSES to describe what we think is
happening in the photo.

We are learning to use WOW! words like adjectives

and verbs to add impact for

our audience (people who read our writing).

Title:  The most terrifying moment of my life.

I heard the birds squawking in the air while I was riding down the zipline.

I saw the snake creeping and wiggling through the mud trying to catch its prey.

I felt like the zipline was momentarily about to collapse at any moment, I would fall to my
death without any protection.

I wonder if my body will survive and not be the snakes next victim.

Image attribution: https://www.boredpanda.com/dangerous-journey-to-school/?utm_source=direct&utm_
medium=none&utm_campaign=direct

Image credits: Christoph Otto

Name: Opeti

Date: 24/7/18

Learning Goal:

We are learning TO USE OUR SENSES to describe what we think
is happening in the photo.

We are learning to use WOW! words like adjectives and

verbs to add impact for our audience (people who read our writing).

Title: The scariest way to school

https://www.boredpanda.com/dangerous-journey-to-school/?
utm_source=direct&utm_medium=none&utm_campaign=direct

I heard splashing in the mucky water and wind blowing past my ears.

I saw the beautiful malachite mountains and the yellow beaked birds in the foggy sky.

I felt terrified, sick and excited at the same time.

I wondered if the other student in front of me felt the same.